Who are the people who have done the most to influence your personal development and in what ways were they influential? (Carleton College)
The one person who, I think, influences everyone in some way, is a mother. She is someone who is with you since the day you were born. She teaches you your first words, she helps you walk your first steps, and she is the one who teaches you your first basic manners. To wish your elders, to say thank you, to apologise, to respect everyone, she teaches you what is wrong and what is right, and everything, from the way you eat to the way you talk, is influenced a little by her. And I can say that I am influenced a lot by my mother. I remember trying to copy everything she did when I was little. The way her hands moved when she spoke, the way she would cook, the way she would dress, put her make-up on, everything. But one thing she used to enforce a lot was speaking the truth. I would get a hard slap every time she caught a lie. And now my friends tell me I suck at lying. I’ve learnt a lot from her, but one thing I will always owe her is the strength she gives me. I look at her and her past and how she went through it and I always feel stronger.
Friends are very very important people in anyone’s life. You spend your days and sometimes even your nights with them. And as you start growing, they become more important than your parents, and your friend circle starts describing what kind of a person you are. Punks, emos, geeks, gossip girls, the bad boys, whichever group you belong to influences you a lot and it also shows when you become an adult and start working. As my Dad is in the Army, I kept changing schools and kept meeting new people and I think I can say I’ve been in all the kind of groups! And I have some wonderful friends from all over India and some of them encourage me to study hard, some emotionally support me, I’ve had some really amazing fun moments with some. So I am pretty balanced that way and its all because of my friends.
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ReplyDeleteI also feel that my mother has played the most important role in my life when I was young and now that I am in my teens I am being influenced by friends and family.
I guess this is common amongst everybody.
This is a sweet post. Good examples to show how your mom has influence you. You show that you have been through a lot by stating that you have been moving around a lot.
ReplyDeleteIt would be better if..
1. there is a transition between the first and second paragraph.
2. you take out the first bit that describes the influence of a general mom because i think people are more interested how YOUR mom influence you not how other moms influence their child.
3. the comma are used more correctly. Try to break up some of your sentences. That might help you to use the comma more correctly.
4. SHOW how your friends have influenced you not just tell!
A personal story or a certain situation would have made your overall argument stronger! But i agree with you, my mother probably is one of the people who have influenced my life greatly!
ReplyDeletei think what you have to share, many can relate with. Even I give much credit to my mother for who i am today and how my friends have influenced my life.
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